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The Problem With Modern Relationships as Opposed to the Engendering of Flowers
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Step outside. I lick
the atmosphere. The breath
around me quivers. I inhale the
wind, get the impression of icicles
mounting on my lungs, and move
to the garden.
Your love is an annual…
I will not survive the frost.
© 2001 Koda Gallegos, All Rights Reserved
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The Problem With Modern Relationships as Opposed to the Engendering of Flowers
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Posted by (user) John~Ashen on Writing.com - 12/18/2011
"Heh heh, very nice. Fun title, following soon by a snappy resolution."
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Posted by (user) John1209 on Writing.com - 12/11/2011
"I really think you should rename the poem. While it might be a modern relationship, there is no suggestion what the problem is, what caused the lover not to survive the frost. I enjoyed the poem though. I thought 'I lick the atmosphere' quite original. The descriptive writing did make me feel 'cold.' :) Nice job and thanks for the read."
