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• Posted by (user) shoumojit on Writing.com - 12/20/2011

"This poem beautifully explains how human nature is restless and mind to experience unfamiliar things, as familiarity too long makes a boring get used to feeling.as poet shows his unhappiness with life as he is not in control of it, and in end after spending some time inside decide to come out to make a new beginning with effort to achieve the true me..."

• Posted by (user) Christina Daltro on Writing.com - 12/19/2011

"Dear Koda, 

Please accept my review of your poem: The Observation
Poem written for 12-08-11 by Koda. (Previously titled "12-08-11")

My review, thoughts and opinion are only to help you - be sure that I am learning from you, from your style, your creativity and from your passion for writing. 

Likes:  I enjoy Koda poems a lot and yours was very well done, Koda. I must congratulate you, I know it's tough. Good work! 

Dislikes:  Nothing disliked me.

Please correct/notice:  Nothing is to be corrected. I tell you, this one is so good and different, too. Keep up with the great work.

I am sending this review because I really liked your work. Well done! Write on!
Thanks for all the fine reviews you do in WDC!

Christina Daltro"

• Posted by (user) alateacakes on Writing.com - 12/15/2011

"Again, you've done a good job with this poem. Still, I would change that first line to read, "When I stand outside," and do away with that ING. Perhaps this is simply my personal reference, but I believe it would read a lot more smnoothly"

• Posted by (user) alateacakes on Writing.com - 12/10/2011

"Though this poem is short, it says a lot. I like the wa you have the opposites of inside and outside woven into this poem. The only item I see which you might want to consider changing is the word "standing" in the first line. When you add ING to the end of a verb,it puts you in the passive voice which has a tendency to slow down your action. I think you would get along just as well to use stand. On the whole, I feel this is a very well written poem. Write on."

• Posted by (user) KingArpod on Writing.com - 12/10/2011

"...There are two things I would do. 1} Change the title Because a piece this well written deserves a better title. 2} Keep writing for you are very good at it. Showing how a person see's themselves when they look for the outside in and then not feeling comfortable with the truth want's to rush back to the inside were things are okay. Brilliant job and hope to read more. So please keep me posted."

• Posted by (user) kyme on Writing.com - 12/10/2011

"Indoor, Outdoors might be a title for this or transparency. Interesting take"